Magic Man

I thought this was pretty good but it should either go somewhere in terms of a plot or introduce other characters like the nose,ears, cheeks, mouth I don't really know ...

The dialogue and wording, I thought ws a bit messy and needed to be cleaned up, it should also be made a bit more comedic.

you probably couldn't give a toss, but I reckon you should make it a comedy poem because with this poem you could. But i still love it and can totally ...

Just two things: firstly in the first paragraph you said rite instead of right and secondly I think you should build up more suspense at the end of the passage. ...